After everyone had viewed our treatment online we decided to gather the group and present it with Mr Hood present to also give advice. In this post i have embedded a copy of the fore-mentioned pitch and i will then comment on the reviews given.
As with our previous pitch, should you have any comments to make or criticism to give please refer either myself or one of the CAM RAW members.
In the pitch a number of points arose.
Mr Hood commented on the fact we had included the opening credits and camera angles and how these are not used in treatments even though we found they were very useful when reading the story. This said we will go back through the treatment and remove said credits and camera angles.
On top of this we had the discussion on the Title of the piece. Withheld suited the idea for the film very well as said, it resembles the idea that information has been Withheld from her mind as well as linking to the term Withheld as in phone number.
